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假如你在武汉一个中学读书。你校准备在“五一”节邀请the Beatles乐队到你们学校举行音乐晚会，欢度“五一”节。请你以学校的名义写一则英语海报，告知全校师生，内容包括以下要点：
1、 时间：5月1日晚上8点；
2、地点：学校音乐厅；
3、对the Beatles乐队略作介绍；
4、座位有限，请提前订位，联系电话：86698669。
要求：根据中文提示，要求语句通顺，书写规范。中文提示要点不要逐句翻译。字数80词左右，开头结尾部分已给出，不计入总词数。
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Dear students and teachers,
No. 1 Middle School
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Dear students and teachers,
The Beatles is invited by our school and is going to give a concert on May 1st in our school music hall①. The Beatles is from UK. It’s very popular in the world. It has made many songs that many Chinese students are interested②. The seats are not many③. Please book your seat ahead of time when④ you want to come. The telephone number is 86698669 and you can call us any time. The concert begins at eight o’clock in the evening. We hope that you will come in time and celebrate May Day with us.
No. 1 Middle School
名师点评
本文作者详细地介绍了The Beatles乐队的情况，语言简练，语句通顺流畅。但出现了几处错误或不妥,如：
① 应当是地点状语在前，时间状语在后，改为“in our school music hall on May 1st”；
② “be interested in”为固定短语，这里缺少介词in；
③ 此处使用了汉语表达式，应改为“There are not many seats in the hall”；
④ 连词使用不当，根据句意，此处应用if，表条件“如果”；
同学们应该通过阅读教师的点评，仔细品味和总结怎样去提高自己的写作水平。（得分：12分，满分：15分）
1、 时间：5月1日晚上8点；
2、地点：学校音乐厅；
3、对the Beatles乐队略作介绍；
4、座位有限，请提前订位，联系电话：86698669。
要求：根据中文提示，要求语句通顺，书写规范。中文提示要点不要逐句翻译。字数80词左右，开头结尾部分已给出，不计入总词数。
Notice
Dear students and teachers,
No. 1 Middle School
原作
Notice
Dear students and teachers,
The Beatles is invited by our school and is going to give a concert on May 1st in our school music hall①. The Beatles is from UK. It’s very popular in the world. It has made many songs that many Chinese students are interested②. The seats are not many③. Please book your seat ahead of time when④ you want to come. The telephone number is 86698669 and you can call us any time. The concert begins at eight o’clock in the evening. We hope that you will come in time and celebrate May Day with us.
No. 1 Middle School
名师点评
本文作者详细地介绍了The Beatles乐队的情况，语言简练，语句通顺流畅。但出现了几处错误或不妥,如：
① 应当是地点状语在前，时间状语在后，改为“in our school music hall on May 1st”；
② “be interested in”为固定短语，这里缺少介词in；
③ 此处使用了汉语表达式，应改为“There are not many seats in the hall”；
④ 连词使用不当，根据句意，此处应用if，表条件“如果”；
同学们应该通过阅读教师的点评，仔细品味和总结怎样去提高自己的写作水平。（得分：12分，满分：15分）