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【学生病文】青春之路深圳市龙华中学高一(7)班陈燕华(文题不对后文。标题中的“青春”指15—30岁左右的时期,而文中第(一)节写的是小时候,第二节写的是上初中时(初三才够得上15岁),大都不属于青春时期。首段末句未扣住标题中的“路”切入,写舞蹈就离谱了。)岁月的原野上,没有什么比青春的花朵色更艳;在岁月的地壳里,没有什么比青春的黄金价更高。打开天空的帷幕,我上演青春的舞蹈。(一)小时候,当其他的小伙伴还窝在妈妈的怀里撒娇闹着要听《白雪公主》的时候,我却和周边的男生们兴致勃勃地一起去爬树取鸟蛋,一起去捅那吊在屋檐下
[Pathology of Youth] Youth Road, Shenzhen City, Longhua High School (7) class Chen Yanhua (title is not right after the title of “youth” refers to the age of 15-30 years, while the text of section Write is a child, the second section is written on the junior high school (third day was enough to get 15 years old), most of them do not belong to the youth period.The first paragraph of the last sentence did not hold the title “road ” cut into, write dance Outrageous.) There is nothing more brilliant than the youthful flowers in the fields of years; in the years there is nothing higher than the price of gold in youth. Open the curtain of the sky, I staged a youthful dance. (A) When I was a kid, I was excited to be playing with the surrounding boys when I was playing “Snow White” while my other friends were still laughing in my mother’s arms. That hang under the eaves