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1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩； 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 初中部 收
姜经志 男，中学英语高级教师，省级骨干教师，淮北市优秀教师，中国外语学习研究会会员，《学英语》、《英语周报》特约编辑、《中学生英语》兼职编委。多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖。曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》、《英语奥林匹克》、《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》，参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》、《初中英语题典大全》、《21世纪英语学习指南》、《初中英语新作文》等，辅导学生30余人次在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。
On Teachers’ Day
It was the Teachers’ Day① last Wednesday. Before it came， we were thinking what we would do for our English teacher and what present we would give her on that day. Wu Juan said， “Let’s give our teacher a surprise.” “What surprise？” we asked. She went on， “Every day before the class， one of us will give a weather and news report. On that day， the reporter will give the English teacher a card and a bottle of pure drink② water. Water is pure and clean， just like our love to our teacher. Water is also useful to the teacher. She talks a lot in class.” “That’s a good idea，” we said happily.
On Teachers’ Day， as soon as the teacher walked in③ the classroom and said “It’s time for class”， we stood up and shouted “Happy Teachers’ Day！”. Wu Li went to the front， and gave her a card and a bottle of water with our best wishes. We did give our teacher a surprise. She held the bottle and didn’t know how to④ say first， then smiled happily. She drank the water at once and said， “This is the best water I’ve ever had. Thank you very much.” We knew she understood our meaning. We laughed and laughed.
安徽省濉溪县四铺中心学校：陈慧莉
1. 优点：
文章开头写学生们讨论“教师节”送老师什么礼物，他们可谓煞费苦心，最后他们决定送卡片和一瓶水。“礼轻情义重”，水对老师有用，而水的纯洁又如学生对老师的爱，小小的礼物寄寓着美好的深情。文章字里行间看出纯洁的师生情意，我们不禁为之感动。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①the Teachers’ Day改为Teachers’ Day。英语中，在表示节日的名称前不加冠词。
②drink改为drinking。drinking water 意为“饮用水”，drinking在此处用作定语，修饰water。
③in改为into。表示“走进教室”，应用walk into the classroom。
④how改为what。What是疑问代词，可用作say的宾语，而how则不行。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得18分。
1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩； 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 初中部 收
姜经志 男，中学英语高级教师，省级骨干教师，淮北市优秀教师，中国外语学习研究会会员，《学英语》、《英语周报》特约编辑、《中学生英语》兼职编委。多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖。曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》、《英语奥林匹克》、《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》，参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》、《初中英语题典大全》、《21世纪英语学习指南》、《初中英语新作文》等，辅导学生30余人次在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。
On Teachers’ Day
It was the Teachers’ Day① last Wednesday. Before it came， we were thinking what we would do for our English teacher and what present we would give her on that day. Wu Juan said， “Let’s give our teacher a surprise.” “What surprise？” we asked. She went on， “Every day before the class， one of us will give a weather and news report. On that day， the reporter will give the English teacher a card and a bottle of pure drink② water. Water is pure and clean， just like our love to our teacher. Water is also useful to the teacher. She talks a lot in class.” “That’s a good idea，” we said happily.
On Teachers’ Day， as soon as the teacher walked in③ the classroom and said “It’s time for class”， we stood up and shouted “Happy Teachers’ Day！”. Wu Li went to the front， and gave her a card and a bottle of water with our best wishes. We did give our teacher a surprise. She held the bottle and didn’t know how to④ say first， then smiled happily. She drank the water at once and said， “This is the best water I’ve ever had. Thank you very much.” We knew she understood our meaning. We laughed and laughed.
安徽省濉溪县四铺中心学校：陈慧莉
1. 优点：
文章开头写学生们讨论“教师节”送老师什么礼物，他们可谓煞费苦心，最后他们决定送卡片和一瓶水。“礼轻情义重”，水对老师有用，而水的纯洁又如学生对老师的爱，小小的礼物寄寓着美好的深情。文章字里行间看出纯洁的师生情意，我们不禁为之感动。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①the Teachers’ Day改为Teachers’ Day。英语中，在表示节日的名称前不加冠词。
②drink改为drinking。drinking water 意为“饮用水”，drinking在此处用作定语，修饰water。
③in改为into。表示“走进教室”，应用walk into the classroom。
④how改为what。What是疑问代词，可用作say的宾语，而how则不行。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得18分。