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姜经志 男，中学英语高级教师，省级骨干教师，淮北市优秀教师，中国外语学习研究会会员，《学英语》《英语周报》《中学生英语》特约编辑。多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖;曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》《英语奥林匹克》《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》，参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》《初中英语题典大全》《21世纪英语学习指南》《初中英语新作文》《中学生英语水平测试》等10余册;曾辅导学生30余人次在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。
Recently I’ve had a discussion with my classmates about whether teenagers should do housework. Some students say that many parents don’t let their daughters or sons do anything， because they hope that their children have more time for lessons so that they can go to university and then have good jobs. Some of us think that it’s a waste of time. Some think that they are too young not to① do anything. They think that the housework should be done by their parents. I don’t agree with it.
Although we are very busy with our lessons， but② I think we should do some housework with our parents， because our parents are also busy and tired after a day’s work. They care for us and we should care for them， too. What’s more， do③ housework can also help us learn to look after ourselves and make our tired brain relax.
I think we should study hard every day in order to learn all the lessons well. At the same time， we should also do some housework every day， it is good for us. Now we are not little babies any longer. We should spend some of our spare time on housework to reduce our parents’ burden.
1. 優点：
很多家长爱孩子爱到无微不至，当前学生在家中普遍不做家务或很少做家务，既有家长溺爱孩子的原因，也有学生自己缺乏责任心的原因。作者通过讲道理的方法对这一错误观点进行批驳，从而确立自己的论点：学生既要努力学习，也应做些家务。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①去掉not。too…to…意为“太……而不能”，表示否定，不可在to前加not。
②去掉but。同一句中，用了though就无需再用but;用了but就无需再用though。
③改为doing。此处应该用动名词短语doing housework作句子主语。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分25分的标准，本文修改前可得23分。
Recently I’ve had a discussion with my classmates about whether teenagers should do housework. Some students say that many parents don’t let their daughters or sons do anything， because they hope that their children have more time for lessons so that they can go to university and then have good jobs. Some of us think that it’s a waste of time. Some think that they are too young not to① do anything. They think that the housework should be done by their parents. I don’t agree with it.
Although we are very busy with our lessons， but② I think we should do some housework with our parents， because our parents are also busy and tired after a day’s work. They care for us and we should care for them， too. What’s more， do③ housework can also help us learn to look after ourselves and make our tired brain relax.
I think we should study hard every day in order to learn all the lessons well. At the same time， we should also do some housework every day， it is good for us. Now we are not little babies any longer. We should spend some of our spare time on housework to reduce our parents’ burden.
1. 優点：
很多家长爱孩子爱到无微不至，当前学生在家中普遍不做家务或很少做家务，既有家长溺爱孩子的原因，也有学生自己缺乏责任心的原因。作者通过讲道理的方法对这一错误观点进行批驳，从而确立自己的论点：学生既要努力学习，也应做些家务。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①去掉not。too…to…意为“太……而不能”，表示否定，不可在to前加not。
②去掉but。同一句中，用了though就无需再用but;用了but就无需再用though。
③改为doing。此处应该用动名词短语doing housework作句子主语。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分25分的标准，本文修改前可得23分。