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Today is March 12th. It is Planting Tree Day①. There were no classes this morning. The all② teachers and students went to plant trees along the road in front of our school.
We went there by bike. As soon as we got there， we began working. First， Mr. Wang， our head teacher asked us to dig holes. The holes must be enough large③ for the trees. After a short time， a truck came. There were many young trees on it. Some students put the young trees in the holes. Other students watered the young trees. What④ hard we worked！
“Trees are our friends. They will make our hometown more beautifully⑤，” I thought. Although I was very tired， I still felt quite happy.
安徽省濉溪县四铺中心学校七（4）班 侯梦婷
1. 优点：
本文真实地记录了小作者的植树经历。全文既有热火朝天的劳动场面的描写，又有个人的心理感受的描写。难能可贵的是，小作者学以致用，运用了自己学过的多种句型，使得文章生动、流畅。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①Planting Tree Day 应改为Tree Planting Day。植树节是专有名词，应为Tree Planting Day。
②The all应改为All the。all 修饰名词时，如果名词前有定冠词，all应置于定冠词之前。
③enough large应改为large enough。enough 修饰形容词或副词时，要放在这些词的后面。
④What应改为How。若感叹句的中心词是形容词或副词，句首应用how。
⑤beautifully应改为beautiful。此处应用形容词作宾语补足语。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得17分。
We went there by bike. As soon as we got there， we began working. First， Mr. Wang， our head teacher asked us to dig holes. The holes must be enough large③ for the trees. After a short time， a truck came. There were many young trees on it. Some students put the young trees in the holes. Other students watered the young trees. What④ hard we worked！
“Trees are our friends. They will make our hometown more beautifully⑤，” I thought. Although I was very tired， I still felt quite happy.
安徽省濉溪县四铺中心学校七（4）班 侯梦婷
1. 优点：
本文真实地记录了小作者的植树经历。全文既有热火朝天的劳动场面的描写，又有个人的心理感受的描写。难能可贵的是，小作者学以致用，运用了自己学过的多种句型，使得文章生动、流畅。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①Planting Tree Day 应改为Tree Planting Day。植树节是专有名词，应为Tree Planting Day。
②The all应改为All the。all 修饰名词时，如果名词前有定冠词，all应置于定冠词之前。
③enough large应改为large enough。enough 修饰形容词或副词时，要放在这些词的后面。
④What应改为How。若感叹句的中心词是形容词或副词，句首应用how。
⑤beautifully应改为beautiful。此处应用形容词作宾语补足语。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得17分。