【习作提交】有一次,我一不小心把豌豆和黄豆混在了一起。我分了半个小时,盆里还有一大堆。怎样才能分得快一些呢?后来,我发现了一个巧妙的方法:找来簸箕,把没分完的豆豆都倒在簸箕里,然后将簸箕稍稍倾斜,这样便轻而易举地把黄豆和豌豆分开了。(《分豆豆》)【评价指导】这段话写出了事情的始末,但观察到了什么,怎样“发现”巧妙方法,这些重点内容却没有细致描写,因而让人觉得空洞无物。写观察中的发现,要注意两点:一是把“发现”的过程写 【】 Submitted to work】 【once, I accidentally peas and soy mixed together. I am a half hour, there are a lot of pots. Later, I found a clever way: to find a dustpan, Peas did not end all poured in the dustpan, and then tilt the dustpan slightly, so it is easy to separate the beans and peas It’s (“Diced Beans”) [Evaluation Guide] This passage wrote the whole story, but what was observed, how to “find ” ingenious method, these key elements are not described in detail, so people feel empty. Write observations observed, pay attention to two points: First, the “discovery ” process to write